Sunday, November 29, 2009

Could this be love? .....by Cerebrally Busy.

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Iphey got out of her car as fast as she could and hurried up the steps of General Hospital Ikeja. In the corridor beyond the nurse’s station, she saw was a slightly harried, fifty-something year old woman with an arm around a sobbing younger woman. Her heart rose into her throat. It was her mother and sister. Something really was wrong…her nephew had crises all the time…but this time was different. Her sister had a strange…aura around her. She was crying like there was no tomorrow, like all hope was lost.

Iphey swallowed. She didn't know how to deal with grief. Her legs suddenly felt like lead, but she managed to lift them one after the other, each step filled with dread.

"Mum…Ngoo, what did they say?" she asked, dreading the answer. Her sister looked over and the despair in her eyes cracked Iphey's heart. She reached for her.

"Iphey…Iphey…my baby, the doctors…said…he's going to…die," her voice broke on the last word. "Iphey, what will I do…he's my life…" she sobbed "my life…"

She clung like a leech and Iphey could do nothing but cry too and murmur useless soothing words. When she could finally get up, she handed her purse to her mother and went into Obi's ward.

He was sleeping so peacefully, but there were so many tubes...It should be illegal for so many tubes to be attached to one small child, Iphey thought angrily, what kind of world is this, where the young die and leave the old? Minutes passed…or was it hours?? Her mother came in and hugged her, offering wordless support. They stood like that for a long time, looking at the boy beneath the sheets, each thinking their own thoughts.

"One Chinedu called," her mother said.

Iphey looked at her mother in shock. "Who?"

"Chinedu. The same number called so many times, I decided to pick it. Who is he?"

She pulled out of her mother's embrace. “Just someone I met some days ago…"

"Anything I should know about?"

Should I tell her? Iphey wondered. No, she decided as she put on a smile that didn’t quite reach her eyes.

“Not yet mum, I’ll let you know if there is."

"You know I want you to settle down soon right?"

"I know but not now…”

Her mother shrugged. "OK but I told him where you were and that you will call him back later. Anyway, you can go home and have some rest.”

Iphey stared. Trust her mother to make all the arrangements. Iphey hugged her without a word and said goodbye to her sister who came back in then.

As she drove home, she became depressed and the tears brimmed over again. Her mother had called after her earlier phone conversation with Aisha. When she had not heard from Iphey, her mother had flown in from Port Harcourt to be with her sister in the hospital. Iphey had gone straight over totally ashamed of herself. She had assumed her sister and nephew were back home. She now thought of all Ngozi had been through. First with her husband's mysterious disappearance, and now her son, Obi, was about to die. She prayed that by some miracle, the little boy pulled through this.

In her street, she noticed a car parked beside the gate and wondered who it could be. Could it be him? The headlights shone brightly on the figure leaning against the wall. It was Chinedu. Her heart gave a very uncomfortable lurch that had nothing at all to do with her family. She frowned and got out of the car, she really didn’t need any distraction right now. All she wanted was to crawl into her bed and cry her eyes out, for Ngozi and for Obi. She hoped a brusque dismissal would get him off her case.

"What are you doing here?" she asked.

"Aisha called me after you both spoke earlier…" he trailed off at the sight of her tears. “Your mother told me about your sister and nephew. Is it very bad…"

She raised her hand and halted him. "I don’t want to talk about it.”

"Iphey, I’m sorry I didn’t call in the past few days. I wanted to hear from you or Aisha first. I’ll like to talk to you…”

“Can I just go in please?" She tried to move away.

Chinedu held her hand. It hurts, he realized. It hurts me that she's hurting. “I left some friends to come over here after speaking with your mother. You can talk to me you know?”

Don’t be nice please, she inwardly pleaded. I can't take it if you're nice.

To her utmost horror she began to sob. The sound grabbed his heart and squeezed. He pulled her into his arms while she wept it out. He gathered little from her unintelligible gabbles, but it saddened him the more. He pried the keys from her fingers and opened the door, and then guided her over the threshold.

"First you're going to sit down, and then I'm going to get you some water. Where's the kitchen?"

"First door to the left," she sniffed. She loved being babied.

He sat her on the couch then he removed her shoes and her jacket. He smiled at the way her eyes widened.

"Don’t worry, that’s all." He could guess where her thoughts had gone. He gave her a wink that was absolutely charming…it had her staring stupidly at the door long after he had left the room.

Good man, she mused. What could have possessed him to be an armed robber? She fell asleep with the barest hint of a smile on her lips and the slightest frown on her forehead.

That was the exact expression Chinedu saw on her face when he came back out. He held the sweating glass in his hand as love budded in his heart for the girl who had fallen asleep with a stranger in her house.


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That is it folks. I have to confess I really loved this post. Now vote for the next chapter on the left side bar. Our contributor is CEREBRALLY BUSY. This is an excerpt from the last entry on her blog. She and her siblings stole. Not armed robbery ooo...LOL, meat from the cooking pot.

"My mother opened the door, planted her hands on her hips and glared at us...my heart stopped, then took off in a sprint. cold sweat broke out all over my body, and my hands became ice. i can't tell how my sibling-partners in crime reacted, cos i was too busy praying for my life. She was going to flog us, she had even taken my brother's belt, but then she sat down on the couch, and tears silently coursed down her face...

"i was child-less for ten years, and all that time, while i was begging God for children, i didnt ask him to give me children who would be thieves, why are you doing this? don't i do enough for you? what have u asked for that i haven't given you?"






56 comments:

  1. I cant belive i'm first again,well this time around i'm not after the ebook,got 1 already.Fragilelooks i dash you my position.lol

    Nicely done faboulous scribbles,i really liked it,really interesting.

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  2. wow im actually second! im going to wake up now, i must be dreaming lol. fantastic I loved this again...all the contributors so far have been fabulous!!!! lol@she loved being babied, once again very well written.

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  3. Great post.. I agree with miss natural, all the contributors so far have been stellar! Hats off to y'all.

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  4. quiet a fanbase,,ill add my self to it.
    I love your blog already and your style.

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  5. yeah faboulously written and a lil bit emotional

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  6. Wow, very nicely done, introducing more avenues for the story to take. once again wow!

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  7. hehe the cup has passed away from me oooo!

    um...that's all i guess...

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  8. WOW THE LOVE EMANATING FORM THIS POST MAKES ME SO LOVE SICK I NEED A HUG,
    GOOD WRITING
    U GUYS ARE GOOD

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  9. oh wait...my name is CerebrallyBusy...the name of my BLOG is Fabulous Scribbles. :) X

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  10. First time here & wow im thrilled!!!...Nice one, nice stories. Pls keep them coing ok?Thanks for stopping by mine...

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  11. Thanks for all the nice comments. Remember to vote for the next chapter. CB, I'll edit your name right away.

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  12. i really loved this one, really nice entry.

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  13. THATA WAS AN AMAZING READ!! We have talented people in blogville tho! good job!! off to vote!

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  14. I enjoyed this and voted oh! sister's pov all the way!

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  15. I just voted for Chinedu + Aisha, love their part the most.

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  16. Thanks for checking on me, my thanksgiving kept me busy. I will check out the e-book sooner. Told my hubby about your blog, he was amazed at your work. Keep it up girl!

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  17. very nice
    i have no criticisms :)

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  18. so many talents on here..it's great to know..

    yeah, i agree..all the contributors have been awesome and the way this entry opened the storyline up is great.

    well done, cerebrally busy

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  19. Definitely a lot of talent on here.
    Myne u honestly deserve a whole lot of credit for coming up with this idea.

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  20. Wow! what a great story - emotional and romantic at the same time.

    I admire your fictional skill Cerebrally Busy.You must be a natural story teller. lol

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  21. Thanks all, @histreasure, Azazel, yes there is really I'm amazed.

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  22. I think this is my favorite so far.

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  23. I agree with the other feedbackers - the talent and creativity on display has been amazing, especially if you consider that the writing has to be done within the constraints of what others have written earlier.

    I don't need to guess too hard what everyone will be voting for... :D

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  24. WOW!! This was nothing short of amazing!!

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  25. wow..what a nice read!....off to vote

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  26. I loved reading this. Big ups to Cerebrally busy, you do well o!

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  27. HABA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    WHY ARE YOU PEOPLE BLATANTLY STEALING OTHER PEOPLE'S IDEAS LIKE THIS?

    FIRST THE "IN MY DREAMS, IT WAS SIMPLER" TEAM CAME UP WITH THE IDEA OF A BLOG SERIES TELLING A STORY IN INSTALLMENTS, YOU COPIED THEM!

    NOW YOU ARE STEALING THEIR PLOT AND STORY LINES TOO. CHEI! NAIJA PEOPLE!

    INSTEAD OF COMING UP WITH AN ORIGINAL IDEA, YOU GO AND STEAL SOMEBODY ELSE'S OWN AND THEN YOU SMUGLY TAKE THE CREDIT FOR IT! THAT IS THE HEIGHT OF SHAMELESSNESS.

    PLEASE FIND SOMETHING MORE USEFUL TO DO WITH YOUR BLOG THAN THIS. IT IS SO NOT ON.

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  28. Kike, I read the series you mentioned and enjoy their stories. I can assure you that they're an inspiration especially some of the individual writers.

    However, story telling in series is definitely not a patented idea. Did you read 14th and Serenity? I will not even claim that interactive stories are new even if this blog started it on naija blogsville. Please see the last post on guidelines for more information.

    Finally, I doubt you really read the story on "In my dreams." I know for a fact that the plot/storyline is not similar to this one at all. Also 5 people have written so far who have no connection with each other so there's no conspired plagiarism here.

    Thanks for your well thought out, articulate and respectful feedback. We hope you keep reading, commenting and voting. Cheers...

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  29. ummmm i don't know what she is on about - cos i have read the blogs like u said Myne and u r right nothing like this - so what the hell? ok before i start sumthing cerebally busy u were fantabulous - can i say the best so far hehehehe? ok i think u just got the best plot to work with - loves it, hmmmm after like another 5posts i will be ready to write o

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  30. http://virgoslounge.blogspot.com/

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  31. thanks shorty but u see i\m the number 33 commenter. that leaves me nowhere. one day e go be my turn.
    nicely done cerebrally busy. u guys give the kick. love this.

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  33. CerebrallyBusy, great job! it was such a good read.
    Myne, u da DON ma'am!

    Kike: I wont bother telling you how rude and unneccessary ur comment is, long thing.
    what exactly is ur definition of stealing other people's idea anyway?
    no matter how novel and idea or concept is, its always an improvement on something that is already in existence.
    someone started this whole blogging business one day and there are a zillion bloggers today or in ur dictionary, a zillion stolen ideas - SO WHAT?!
    I'll be glad to see what "novel" ideas or concepts u have on ur own blog.

    @Myne: doff my hat at ur very matured response.

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  34. Oh my it keeps gettin better!!!! Good job Cerebrally Busy!...can't wait for the next part ooo, I'm on the edge of my seat ;-)

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  35. Hmm...waht really is new under the sun....
    sha by the way, i loved this one...
    and the last one too..

    I'm spoilt for choice...
    so who's next?

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  36. jeez that kike na be real hater o! Myne i love your response! very mature and on-point.

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  37. one day, one day oh, i will be first.. just one day! lol
    I like the way you write, do you have a novel? i want to read it.. :-) x

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  38. Remi, thanks for the comment.

    You can download the first part on Lulu or wait for the book next month.

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  39. Great story! Thanks for stopping in my blog. :)

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  40. Great! Loved it! Very very connectable (if dts a word...lol)

    Good job Myne!!!

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  41. Hmmm
    Nice one.
    Strangely enough, Iphey's meet with Chinedu reminds me of some long lost...
    Nice one, Cerebrally Engaged.
    *chuckle*
    Nice one

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  43. Thank you for the comments, I always appreciate it!

    I'm going to do a post probably tomorrow about the places I went if anyone wanted to go.

    Lovely writing by the way!!

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  44. Wow CB,you are the bomb jare...........
    Myne,this is just too good a piece!

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  45. Wow CB,you are the bomb jare...........
    Myne,this is just too good a piece!

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  46. Wonderful. :-D You never cease to amaze, Myne. ;-)

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  47. well, this is really good :)
    hope you achieve your dreams!

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  48. Fabulous writing...fabulous story. Sweet love with no agenda....lovely!

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  49. WOW!! What a great story!!

    Definitely a lot of talent here!!!

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  50. ...and Kike, You didn't have to be rude. There are one million ways of saying stuff without mudslinging.

    Myne, you know you rock, right?

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  51. @cerebrallybusy You know i love you right :) You did a great job on this one, luv. well done.

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  52. I like, I like, I like....omo! you all are so talented. I'm doing catch up before I read the next.

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  53. I connected with this post! Great job.

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